Body language

Ah, another one I see a lot of new writers miss. The whole body language can add so much more to your writing. My pet peeve are all those adverbs and this can remove most, if not all of them.

So, where to start, I hear you ask. Easy. Think about the situation you’ve just put your character in. Then imagine how you’d react.

Now, I can’t cover every situation, but enough to give you a start. And, remember, most can cover more then one emotion, so please get the setting right first.

The Head Tilt – Now, this is one we all do. But why? Well, mainly when we are listening to someone and want to make them realise we are paying attention. Maybe, we are waiting for a response to a question and tilt our head with maybe a slightly scrunched up brow.

Rubbing a hand over chin or beard – The person is thinking, but is it good or evil thoughts. If he’s standing up, straight and tall, might be good. Now imagine him bending over a victim. Someone tied up. It’s way different. Add in some icy eyes and even I’m getting a chill.

Eye contact – This is a good one. If they make direct eye contact, they are trying to be dominant or are confident. Lowered and they are submitting or unsure.

Arms crossed – Your character is being defensive. Or are they? Now imagine them with slumped shoulders, moist eyes, and crossed arms It gives a completely different response. Now they are hurt, Maybe rubbing their arms as they shiver. Maybe they are spilling their heart about a bad situation or some abuse they suffered.

Tapping their fingers – Impatient. But maybe they are taping their lips for a kiss? Tapping the table in time to the music?

Nail biting – Nervousness. Does your character bite their nails all of the time? Is it no more habit? Maybe they are in a difficult situation and have just started?

Rubbing hands together – This can be a fun one. Why do you rub your palms together. cold and trying to warm up. How about we go back to leaning over a victim and have our villain run his hands together? I’d dread to think what their next move might be.

Clenched fist – Basically move away because they are angry. Probably trying not to hit someone.

Reduced body space – A confident person will like lots of space around them. It can also make you feel more confident. A person who shuffles up and reduced their own body space is feeling intimidated. If the body turns slightly to the side, it becomes more of an aggressive stance.

And last but not least, the romantic body language – Women may lick their lips, wink, walk in a sexy way.

A man may have a relaxed stance, uncrossed arms. If he crosses his legs, then he may have lost interest or nervous

Touch is very important. They might run their fingers up the other person’s arms. Run a thumb over their cheek. Brush against their interest. They can’t keep their eyes of each other.

So, there you go. It’s not always simple and you have to add in the other details to make the emotion and gesture obvious. More on that later when I discuss the emotions on their own.

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Descriptions

This is the one thing that can make or break your book, and we all hate them. Too much and the readers turn off, and too little, they vanish too. Finding the right happy middle ground can be hard going.

So, I’m going to help you along with some ways of describing things. Be it emotion, places, situations, or a person.

Today, I’m starting with eyes. Yes, eyes. They say the eyes are the soul to a person and they do show their emotion. Next time, watch a person’s eyes and gauge their emotions from them alone.

If they shine, bright, vibrate, gleaming, then they are probably happy. Moist or shimmering – about to cry but from sadness or happiness?

If they are angry, have they hardened or gone dark? Tired – the eyelids might be droopy.

Crying – puffy, bloodshot, red-rimmed, swollen.

They can be narrowed or slit, penetrating, soft, sparkly – all depending on the mood. And the description must be right.

For the shape try – almond, deep-set in the face, cross-eyed, oval, round, prominent, symmetrical, off-set.

And the colour? Blue, brown, green – yes, but isn’t that a bit bland? How about vibrate green, mahogany brown, chestnut brown, emerald green. Doesn’t that sound so much better?

How about icy? Icy blue or her eyes turned icy the moment she set eyes on him. Oh, can you imagine the room going cold around them?

Angelic – she gazed at me with her angelic eyes showing me her innocence. An innocence I was about to take. Oh, I so have to use this one in the future.

Intoxicating – The moment our eyes meet, I knew she’d drink me dry the first chance she had.

Back to dark, I love this one for eyes – When our eyes meet, I realised the trouble I might be in. The darkness in his eyes sent my heart into a shiver, like he hunted me. Or maybe – The way his eyes darkened, made me understand he’d do anything to get our child back.

So, what have you learned? Not to use the eye colour as a bland description, and how to add the emotion to their eyes. Adding their emotion brings out their feeling without all those dialogue tags. You know the ones – angerly, happy. Get rid of them all. It will tighten your writing and draw the reader in.

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Fareious Brothers

Did you know all 3 books in the Fareious trilogy are now released?

No? Well, they are.

Meet James Farmer – the eldest brother who ended up changing his name. A billionaire playboy who’s about to meet his match. A woman who’ll get under his skin during a life-threatening situation, that neither think will survive. Yet, they do. But things get worse when James has to return to his past to keep her safe. A bigger threat appears and he’s not sure they can survive.

Next, we meet Hunter Fareious – the baby of the family. Having lost his love many years ago, he travels to Birmingham to watch over her from a far. But when she’s left injured after being targeted, she must begin to trust the one man who’s brought her warmth back. Yet, when both are abducted James bring in a elite bunch of mercenaries to find them. Can they?

And not forgetting the middle brother. With no soul-mate he’s their last chance at ending the threat. However, they never expected that to change. Now he has a woman in his life with a dark past. One which is about to haunt them and destroy all three couples. Can the threat be ended? Can they all live in peace?

These books are hot and steamy and have a BDSM subplot. All contain a full psychological romantic suspense story and are full length novels.

What makes a good villain?

The villain – don’t underestimate your baddie.

The baddie has to be just as developed as your good guy or gal. They require good and bad points and a way for your reader to identify with them.

Yes, readers do need to have some sort of love for your villain. I’ve skimmed through loads of books when the villain is on stage, because they just don’t appear real.

They need some good motivation for being evil. Did they lose the girl to their best friend? Did their best friend bully them and now they are getting their own back? Were they abused as a child and that’s all they know? Got into the wrong crowd? There are lots of reasons.

Add in a description. Give your readers a way of imaging them. Maybe not a full description but enough to wet their taste buds.

Give them the past your have come up with. Not all in one go – all that narrative can turn a reader off, but in bits and bobs where required. Have they abducted someone? Add in some memories why. Have they killed someone? Again, get some thoughts running through their heads. A person rarely kills without something in his mind.

You might even give them a love interest.

Above all else, most baddies I come across have something in common with the hero. A shared past or partner. Same upbringing – hero comes out better then them. There’s the jealousy.

In a twist, you might start with a hero who turns evil. Or the villain becomes the good guy. Play around and give your readers a hook.

Most baddies aren’t stupid. They are more clever than anyone takes them for. That’s why they get away with things. They make your hero look good.

So, go and plan out your bad guy or gal. Make them lovable. Make them cry out for attention. Give them a backstory your readers are dying for.

Thank you’s

Yeah, I got the cover I wanted for the first in my Hunter’s series. By the way, that’s not the actual series title, just shortened stand-in. Don’t want to give too much away.

It’s stunning and I’d like to thank Kim at Atlantis designs for producing the prefect premade.

I’ve also got a second cover to match another premade I fell in love with. It was a standalone, but now a series of two – but will that change? Another thank you to Moorcrooft designs, who will hopefully deliver the latest cover to my collection tomorrow. They are going to match the typo and remove the border. The colour base is blue.  Going to be a fab series.

Plots are outlined for all of the three above books, but the Fareoius trilogy must come first. I’m close to three quarters through the first edit of the first book. Hope to get that over to my editor by July. A month behind.

I’m nearly 20,000 into the second book, after deleting the whole 21,000 words last week. But it’s stronger and better.

And last but not least. Not been a bad month fore sales. So, a big thank you to my newest readers. Enjoy.